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Sunday, July 12, 2009
A First Time for Everything by Michelle Reale | Word Riot
Michelle Reale's flash, A First Time for Everything, took a few minutes for me to get into. The majority of this piece felt like the writer was looking for something. She finds it in the last two paragraphs and I thought that everything prior could have been cut.
This is flash, a genre where we claim intense focus. However, this piece spends so much time on the mother and father that we sort of forget about the narrator and her sister - until those final graphs where the real flash occurs. The image of those girls looking through a map, longing to escape the madness imposed upon them by their parents, is really touching. This ending needs to be the beginning, these girls are where the real truth of the piece lies.
I could go into more detail, but I'm sorta tired. Happy flashing.
I give this story one fresh polish sausage from a deli on Milwaukee Ave. in Chicago.